Reciprocal Causation: 5 (the Writer\'s

¶ … Reciprocal Causation: 5 (the writer's overall description of reciprocal causation is clear, succinct, and thorough. The role of environment, the role of modeling, and especially the role of self-efficacy are all outlined well. One point is deducted for the poor grammar used throughout the paper.)

Differentiating from Behaviorism: 2 (the author supplies an excellent explanation of the differences in the two theories, in spite of bad grammar.)

Using Student as...to elaborate on reciprocal causation: 4 (the example of student as is succinct but clear. The author shows how the teacher could intervene and improve student outcome by intervening. However, the author could have done a better job explaining how the three aspects of the cycle related to student as. For example, demonstrating exactly which stages a teacher should intervene would make this aspect of the paper better.)

Spelling, Grammar, and Clarity of Writing: 3 (the writing is so clear, it makes up for the poor grammar in this paper)

Feedback: The grammar in this paper is deplorable, littered with sentences like: "This 'reciprocal causation' shows the relevance from all issues, and thus impacting each other with mutual respect." However, it is possible to look past the bad grammar and see that ironically the paper itself is well-written. The author explains both behaviorism and social cognition, comparing and contrasting the two theories. One of the strongest aspects of the paper is the author's explanation of self-efficacy using the example of student as. Therefore, it is evident that the writer has a grasp of the subject matter and also knows how to communicate effectively. The author simply needs assistance with the English language. Looking past the mess of grammatical errors, readers will notice a clear, logical progression of thoughts.

Overall Description of Reciprocal Causation: 3 (the author should offer a more extensive and comprehensive definition of the term. In fact, the author repeats the word "reciprocal" in the definition of reciprocal causation. An ensuing sentence makes no sense either: "Each one of the these variables influences each other in a cycle that can start on any of the variables.")

Differentiating from Behaviorism: 1 (the author does not adequately define behaviorism, which makes the comparison between the two theories a poor one. The author mistakenly states that behaviorism is about "trial and error.").

Using Student as...to elaborate on reciprocal causation: 4 (the example used is too long and verbose. However, the author does address each of the three parts of the cycle in detail, and discusses how teachers could have intervened at various points in the cycle.)

Spelling, Grammar, and Clarity of Writing: 1 (Poor writing and grammar make this paper difficult to read).