Women Were Restricted in Many Ways During

¶ … women were restricted in many ways during the Suharto period (was this partly because of Suharto policies or practices -- YES this is explained in the essay) but that since that time, reforms have been undertaken to improve their status and freedom of action.

Short summary of a few statistics with regards to the country and its women rather than 'statistics' per se, augment the problem as stated above with information about the previous state of women. -- statistics are just background intro, they also include women

Why the country has been and is so interesting to study leading to argument of paper the reader is not interested in why it is interesting to you. The reader is interested only in following the theme/argument of the paper. -- this also relates to women, it's just an attention grabbing technique and doesn't take more than one sentence.

c. Specific statement of purpose for the study and thesis statement:

"This paper shall be written on the topic of the impact of Suharto's fall from power (the fall of authoritarianism/corruption/political persecution) and the democratisation that followed it, on Indonesian women in the public arena in urban areas."

II. Detail on Indonesia (History and Politics) As stated, this is all merely descriptive material which appears to have nothing to do with your argument. Any of what's in your brief history which is not relevant to the status of women is irrelevant to the paper. Leave it out. It's like dust on your eyeglasses -- it just gets in the way. -- please read essay it does have to do with argument, I explain it more than once

a. Indonesia as a state

i. brief early history of the country

-Portuguese explorers

-violent Japanese

-pressing need for independence

ii. post-independence hardships

-Sukarno

-Suharto and his grip on the country

-how status of women changed from independence through

Sukarno and Suharto

-lack of democracy/1998 crisis/Suharto resignation include if and only if this is related to the status of women -- it IS and it is explained

b. Transition from background on the country to an overview of the current situation with respect to the subject at hand/what Suharto left behind and how the women's status has changed

c. Brief overview of the religious status of the country and how this has intermingled with politics / Islamic religion and how it affects women

III. Social and Women's Issues