b. Sports can help teach us how to live good and honest lives.
Part Two
The paragraph has several aspects which create strengths and weaknesses within its context. The opening lines do present a broad statement which draws the reader in. However, the paragraph opens with a statement which can be construed as a fallacy; no one truly knows if anything is "God-given." I also think the lengthy continuation of the types of choices we make is distracting, we get the point. Not so much fluff was needed to progress into the thesis, which has nothing to do with our choice of what flavor gum we chew. The phrase ad infinitum should also be in italics to denote the Latin origins. I also think the statement regarding choosing the right one is way too strong; any education is a good education, thus the term "Loserville" inappropriate. However, the paragraph...
The front page has nothing but man's failures;" Former Supreme Court Judge Earl Warren, describes the concept that man is allowed to succeed and grow within the context of organized sports, where discipline and hard work prove to be the path to success. I had always vaguely understood this concept myself; yet never truly embodied it. Not until my soccer team proved to me the success of my own hard work. The reward of placing so high in the AA provincial soccer tournament was an experience I will never forget. Such an experience helped me gain more faith in myself and the world around; therefore representing the concept that sports such as soccer hold a valuable role in the creation of a self-sufficient and responsible character within individuals.
